Anonymous Resume Review
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As stated,.. to long. One OR two pages at max. Manage your white space.
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Here is a starting point that I made.... no rewordings yet, just trimming the fat and fixing formatting...
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That's a good start. Now I can get an idea of the complexity of the environments they have been in and the technologies that they have worked with.
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Another one from him/her...
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Another one...
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@scottalanmiller said in Anonymous Resume Review:
Another one...
Does he/she have any certs or formal training? It would be nice to make a full page resume.
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Idk, if it were me I would take out the Gentoo part and just have a Linux domain, unless every system was Gentoo. I just can't believe someone was running that in a business setting.
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@scottalanmiller said in Anonymous Resume Review:
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Just some goofy little things I've noticed. Not all lines have a period at the end. They should probably be uniform.
It says 120pc, singular but the other devices are plural. Same with 160pc.
Under Network Administrator Junior, it should probably be Windows Server 2003, not Windows 2003 server.
The line starting with "Provide" should be Provided technical support, since the previous lines were past tense. And the "for with" is confusing. That line also has an extra space at the beginning.
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@scottalanmiller said in Anonymous Resume Review:
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Much better, I know see a an IT professional with 13 years experience.
I know @scottalanmiller thought this line was unnecessary, but I think it is a good idea to sum up your experience really quick on the first line so the employer knows right off the bat you have 13 years experience
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Instead of doing 160 pc (which for some reason I read as pieces) it may be worthwhile to say clients or something similar.
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@coliver said in Anonymous Resume Review:
Instead of doing 160 pc (which for some reason I read as pieces) it may be worthwhile to say clients or something similar.
How about workstations?
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PCs is definitely a bad term as people misuse it all of the time. Your servers are as much PCs as the desktops are.
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@IRJ said in Anonymous Resume Review:
@coliver said in Anonymous Resume Review:
Instead of doing 160 pc (which for some reason I read as pieces) it may be worthwhile to say clients or something similar.
How about workstations?
That is much better. I was going to say desktop clients but that doesn't tell the full story.
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This is going to be all over the place. I'm just saying it as I see it scrolling up and down.
Take out the objective.
Put the education near the top. You paid for it, show it off. Maybe just under "specialized training". Not sure what specialized training means specifically as there is nothing saying where the training happened or the material. I'd maybe change the verbiage or simply leave it out. They are already listing it further down so it's redundant. It's not an overview or point of interest at that point, it's just making the resume longer.
The experience section is tough to read. With every employer, give a short 3 sentence explanation of what they did and what you did for them. Then have bullet points of simple, one line examples of what you did. Here would be some examples, slimming down for the actual resume of course...
Accomplishments:
*Saving money while maintaining network integrity by renegotiating contracts
*Active Directory/Group Policy management
*Remote Server setup and maintenance
*VMware/RemoteFX
*Software deployment via PDQ Deploy over the intranetwork
*Exchange server/Print server/VoIP setup and support
*Roaming profile configurations
*Data backups & restoration
*SQL database administration
*SAN & NAS setup and maintain
*Desktop support
*Cisco/HP intermediary networking
*Wi-Fi infrastructure design, configuration, and administrationOperating system experience...
They could simply say: Windows 2000 Server - Windows Server 2012 R2, and Windows 7 - Windows 10 (only need the relevant, supported OS releases. I'm not going to say on a resume I know OS/2 Warp...)
References Available Upon Request: Why the colon? I would think you'd want just a period, or no punctuation. The colon looks weird.
Application Software and Systems Proficiency...
Instead of listing multiple VNCs... I wouldn't list anything. It's not a skill to use that software. I would say "Various remote screen sharing utilities" if something needs to be listed.
Don't break all the programs of Office out. Just list Office 2007 - Office 2016. That can be covered in a single line.
Don't break out Adobe products like Acrobat, Photoshop... just say "Adobe Creative Suite".
Overall, combine both of those sections.
That should cut down on the fluff.
There's a weird line on the left side of the first page of employment, and not the second. Eliminate that line. The job titles are in italics, they should be bold. Italics don't catch your eye.
In the first job employment, there is a sub-bullet for XenServer. Don't do sub-bullet points, it just looks sloppy.
For experience, do the same formatting you did with education. It looks cleaner. The formatting that was used is just a run-on mess.
The application support, that formatting for bullets is messy. You went form vertical bullets to then using the whole page for bullets (which doesn't look good), it's inconsistent so change. Same with operating system experience.
Margins, don't slim them down so much. You don't need margins that wide, it looks condensed (in a bad way) and is hard to read.
Last thing on experience... Reading some of the content, is worthless and a waste of space. Things like this...
"Developed a computer naming convention to determine Franchise, general area, user(s) and operating system which resulted in faster response and repair to any issues."
You decided what names to give the computers, that's not worthy of a resume IMHO.
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20 network printers - Printer support is one of the lowest tiers of IT pay. Saying you worked somewhere too poor to outsource it (or have a tier 1 bench guy to deal with it) implies lower wages.
Configured and maintained several virtual environments, including Windows XP and Microsoft Server 2003 - A 16 year old, and 13 year old operating system have nothing to do with a virtual environment. This line right here I would have thrown out the resume over.
Deployed several ADP time clock server systems for use both locally and out of state - How about Deployed and supported HR tracking system across state lines. Time clocks also are pretty low on the pay value standpoint.
Developed and implemented several quality control processes. Tell me more specifically as well as what the outcome was. Ex. "Standardized on a common image and application deployment system with SCCM and Airwatch to cut new employee setup from 1 week to 15 minutes, with Mobile device app deployment being self service." What you did, what business problem it fixed, and how impactful was it.
Organized several networking closets, maintaining business continuity and reducing network latency. Another meaningless sentence. "Brought in structured cabling, flattened 3 tier network design to leaf spine, solving multicast problems for imaging performance, and reducing the support and management costs by 50%" Cleaning up some cables in a closet, and color coding them makes it sound like you didn't have much productive work to do and were bored.
Managed setup and maintenance of Active Directory, Windows 2003 server - More highly generic phrasing. - Deployed GPO's to homogenize configurations, automate printer and application deployments of end user devices, and reduce application ticket support by 60%. Your original sentence implies you had a single 2003 server in the entire place, and somehow that kept you occupied for 5 years. This isn't something I'd want to highlight that the environment was this small/simple.
Network Administrator Junior - So this place had one server and you were the junior guy? I tend to drop superlative title bits that don't really make sense (I would simply say network administrator). I used to have a title that was 4 works long (Junior Assistant Systems Analyst) or some nonsense that 3 of the 4 words implied I was a lackey. I simply put Systems Administrator (What most closely tied to my job) on my resume.
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@John-Nicholson said in Anonymous Resume Review:
20 network printers - Printer support is one of the lowest tiers of IT pay. Saying you worked somewhere too poor to outsource it (or have a tier 1 bench guy to deal with it) implies lower wages.
Or implies that that entry level bench person was.... you.
