Solved Fixing My Resume
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@scottalanmiller said:
Staples would be expected to be very light.
Ok, Scott has done some work on the resume for me. It's been edited and is updated on the OneDrive.
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@scottalanmiller said:
Watch for little things like capitalization mistakes (VMware not VMWare) and don't get names wrong (VMware vSphere not VMware Virtual vSphere.)
Not sure why that was VMWare...I know better...
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Fix the alignment on the top most section. The carriage return is starting way too far to the right causing there to be unnecessary extra lines.
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This line bothers me:
Setup own website running Wordpress on LAMP server as a virtual machine on ESXi 5.1
It's too long and it has too much info and it is too wordy. I don't suggest not mentioning these things, but it is too much in general.
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Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
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Turn: Setup and networked 2,700 laptops for Tableau conference in Las Vegas, NV
Into: Setup 2,700 laptops for Tableau conference, Las Vegas -
@scottalanmiller said:
Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
True. And okay, I like it.
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This bit is ridiculously large:
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Try this instead....
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No one cares about your CompTIA and putting in thrice is beyond obnoxious. Don't put it at all. The time of your certs is not very important either. Tell someone if they ask. And repeating CompTIA three times is a bit over the top.
And two whole lines for some courses at OCC is too much. And pointing out that it is a community college is not necessary, especially when it is part of SUNY.
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@thanksajdotcom said:
@scottalanmiller said:
Maybe condense to:
Implemented WordPress on LAMP server on ESXi.
Short and sweet. You don't mention WP or LAMP versions, why ESXi version?
True. And okay, I like it.
The word server might still be too much.
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Ok, the suggested changes have been made so far. Next?
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You use a lot of weird /. Stop that
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Here is how to trim the NTG bit without losing a single thing (seriously, nothing lost...)
Before
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And after....
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Can you pasted that as text please?
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Technical Support Specialist November 2012-March 2014
Niagara Technology Group Piffard, NY & Dallas, TX
Provided technical support and consultations to clients across the country.
• Tech support for clients across the country with varying environments working on an international team
• Advised in the purchasing decisions of replacement parts, printers and new computers
• Team member deploying new infrastructure to clients that included ESXi servers; HP & Dell desktops
• Unitrends installer working with clients to implement best-practice backup strategies, as well as configure & troubleshoot backups for Windows Server 2000-2012, SQL Server 2005-2012, Exchange 2003-2013, AIX & Linux
• Designed and deployed large-scale PBX systems for clients. Hardware capacity planning, project estimation and assessing the most fitting solution; primarily working on Elastix and Asterisk systems
• Managed Office365 internally and externally; account management, permissions and deploying MS Office
• Provided internal technical support for administrative staff including printers, desktops and Pertino VPN -
Education and Certifications
Computer Information Systems Coursework, 2011-2012 State University of NY, OCC. Syracuse, NY
CompTIA A+, Network+ & Security+ Certifications -
With all of that trimming, you should be almost exactly at one page. It shows why people say that it should be short and why things look like filler. You had the same things listed twice, lots of extra words, etc.